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It's a start.

Okay here's my input.

Firstly, the voice acting is weak and the quality was so bad it actually made me want to stop watching. If that had been improved on it would have been a much more enjoyable little animation, the writing was actually quite good, and I chuckled at a few of the jokes. I would structure it more though, it started to feel repetitive and boring by the end.

Spend more time on your artwork and animation, no matter how good the jokes are, watching mouths move in an otherwise mostly still picture is incredibly tedious. Make the characters more detailed and have them move around a bit, interact with the environment or move from area to area.

Overall I'd have to say you have the potential to be great at this, but spend a lot more time learning how to do it, studying successful flash movies and preparing to make your own, redraft your ideas again and again and have people read them until you're completely satisfied and do the same with artwork and animation. The more time you spend on it, the better it will be.

Wow.. So..

Like at first i didn't think i liked it cause i didn't laugh and i know it was supposed to be amazing. but im sleep deprived so i feel like that WAS AWESOME AND I WANNA HUG IT. GO YOUUU

Hmm

Okay not bad. I assume you're new to flash.

I suggest you sit down after making a flash and just go through it, thinking of ways beyond your skill that you can improve it. then learn what you need to learn and keep trying arduously til you get it. Then it will be a kick-ass flash you enver though possible.

Oh and maybe spend some time on a loading screen?

but congrats.

Huh.. wow

So at first I simply wanted to rebel because I saw the narrator as an authoritarian figure but then I realised that maybe he was trying to guide me. But I stuck to my beliefs and rebelled and the world filled with the colour, as if I was doing the right thing. But several times I thought that all the narrator wanted was the best for me.

This game is seriously open to interpretation in my eyes but it's an engaging, thoughtful little project that really spoke to me.

Well done.

Wow

That was really addictive. Completed it in a couple of hours. Fairly easy if you just keep at it. And it never really bored me. Though my wrist is a bit tired.

WOW. Brilliant submission.

Hm.

Annoyingly tedious.

But fun to play.
Good effort, if a little bland. There's nothning to make it unique and make it stand out. like alien hominid.

But it's very well made and fun to play.

Cheers,

Tom